My rap about denim [mp3 link included. terrible]

[386]

I know I'm a pretty weak rapper. Anyways, I got into this predicament where I had to write some rhymes and get ready to rap for a show. One of the songs was about what gets you hype and what not. At first, I thought about Apple computers but later I thought about denim, so I came up with these lines and you know I have superfuture to thanks for all of my current denim knowledge and follies:

Indigo stains the cotton wefts and weaves

Starched and stiff fabrics cover all of my sleves

"Are you from Texas?" I am questioned as they see my tuxedo

The contrast of my denim destroys like a torpedo

Let's talk about the insignificance of a back pocket pattern

I wear dungarees at my waste because you know I'm not a sagger

Chain-stitched, keep it real, all up in the inseam

The selvage is a beautiful hue of green.

I guess I should share this to embaress myself. None of ya'll know me anyways, so it doesn't matter or anything. Basically, I just wanted to know what you think and maybe how I could make it better. My group recorded a rough cut of it [my rap is towards the end of the song with a couple lines that changed for the better] and you can check it out at http://www.myspace.com/communistprepschool as "Revolution Rap Remix" if you're interested.

[dismalfuture]

This belongs in the "You know you're addicted..." thread...

[watchman]

haha sweet. It's funny how you can tell the people who've done it before from those who haven't in that song. You did alright though, not everyone can rap about denim

[__3xL]

damn you suck .... bad ....

looking like weird al too ..

nah it wasn't THAT bad ....

[386]

Thanks for listening to my garbage, ya'll. Too bad I had to make a whole new thread instead of using some other thread. Well, might as well consolidate every thread about denim into one big one, right?

[Konfucius]

that rap owns..

the brainwasher reminds me of the band Poison the Well

Travis' birthday party owns

[masuerte]

hehe... I haven't even listened to it yet

[steven]

i like ur flow... some 90's west coast flow

[masuerte]

I just heard it and it wasn't bad for indie hip hop. Liked your flow, the guy after though deserved me closing the page. Reminds me of all those days I wore baggy clothing and wore a beanie... oh hiphophead style thank god you're gone.

Sorry for being a hater earlier.

[sneakeraddict]

I actually thought it was quite good!!

you need to lose a few syllables on the longer lines though surely?

for example: i wouldnt have known what these sentences were if it wasnt for your printed lyrics:

"Let's talk about the insignificance of a back pocket pattern

I wear dungarees at my waste because you know I'm not a sagger"

to be honest I didnt really like those lyrics, because if you're a denim fan, then surely the back pocket design is important!!! ? Its what sells jeans!

Other than that, I thought you have a good voice. A bit robotic (in a good way)

You need to give a shout out to SuperFuture in the revised version!

[__3xL]

Threw together a fit & thought I was the shit

noticed my crispy fresh indigo scarred my dick

fucking crotch rivets on my space age pimped jeans -

I went balls to the wall cuz I had no clean draws know what i mean ?

after the party girl noticed my sack was stained blue -

she said do it taste like blueberries I said yea - and you look hungry too ...

she unbuttoned my selvage dropped um to my ankles dude -

she licked me for and hour then fell asleep drunk - bitch how rude ...

yoooooo numero got mad flows - spit hot fire !!

[__3xL]

Did you bazturds like my rhyme or what ?

:-)

[386]

It was pretty good, but personally I don't curse or talk about my nutsack or most of the subject matter you rapped about for that matter. It flowed alright "on paper," though. I'll write 16 lines and rep superfuture in a few days. Word.

[__3xL]

few days came and went and 386 has no flow .. profane or otherwise ..

[greentea]

i like the beat its dope!

[jubei]

anybody heard that new Lupe joint "pressure"? he's got a whole verse with a denim analogy...

[__3xL]

Everrryyythiiing I dooo - I doooo fooorrrr youuuuuu ....

[jubei]

yeah that part's a little annoying, but what cracks me up about the beat is that he jacked the Stephen Colbert Eagle call as a sample, lol