New T-Shirt Design...lookin for critics

[bornwithit]

I am a rising junior at Denison University in Granville, OH. I've been an avid street wear head for a year or two, and am considering testing the waters as far as apparel goes. Let me know what u think of it. Thanks.

Front

http://i65.photobucket.com/albums/h226/bornwithit/bornteefront.jpg

Back

http://i65.photobucket.com/albums/h226/bornwithit/bornteeback.jpg

lord forgive him, he got those dark forces in him

[SENDkylHISPASSWORD]

Submit it to Threadless.com

It's clever (kind of) but the graphic is messy and the text placement is akward. Clever shirts are in such an abundance now that they dont really appeal to me. I was never one for Illustrations on t-shirts anyways.

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[watchman]

i like the black/gold color scheme, and the front image placement, but the back design is awkward as previously stated. Also, the theme of the shirt seems kind of played out. Threadless is a good thing though, post it on there and see how the votes come in.

[sonick]

text on graphic tees = no.

[Servo2000]

Usually I'm not one for insulting without giving any ideas for improvement, but I'm just going to be honest with you:

It's frickin' god awful.

i t a l i c s f o r l i f e

http://www.liarsliarsliars.com

[Guest doubletap]

not feeling it... everything you see now has a gun or some kind of gun/army theme.

streamline the sickness

[thinctank]

the message is clear; the front image is strong enough without the back text and graphic. the back of the shirt is redundant.

[adsurgo]

ughhh

[englandmj7]

Rogue Status?

[RAISED BY WOLVES]

Born With what? You mean to tell me you came straight out your mother's vagina in a tram with gat in hand?

[chaos1124]

Quote:

the message is clear; the front image is strong enough without the back text and graphic. the back of the shirt is redundant.

--- Original message by thinctank on May 29, 2006 06:13 PM

so true.

I'm not too fund of your concept. but at least it's easy to read, and the illustration on the front alone can get the job done.

the tagline "born with it" is really tacky and kills the cool of your shirt.

blk/gold combo is too too common. you need more interesting colorways.

the illustration has to be redone. it's awfully excuted.

why don't you do a front shot illustration? I think it'd be cool if you show the face of the baby, smoking a ciggar while holding the weapon...

good start tho.

[bornwithit]

thanks all

lord forgive him, he got those dark forces in him